今天要繼續分析「上網購物如何幫助英文寫作？」
上集文章在這裡
https://www.ptt.cc/bbs/TOEFL_iBT/M.1560155608.A.A67.html
上一篇文章提到了作者如何在商品評論的開頭就提出Thesis Statement.
按照英文寫作邏輯，接下來會使用Reason和Examples來支持論點。
讓我們繼續看下去：
WHAT’S WRONG WITH THEM
“As much as I searched it seems most of them ignored some simple facts –
one is that remote controls don’t all look like they did in the 1990’s,
they are no longer big thick handheld devices.
Many of them these days are tiny credit card style that absolutely get lost
in the cavernous slots most remote holders have,
in other words the slots are too tall and too deep.
On the other hand a lot of remotes have unusual shapes these days,
like Tivo for example that are substantially thicker than regular ones.”
...
這段說明其他商品瞎在哪裡(Reasons)；
也可以看出英文寫作的邏輯：
先用一句話(topic sentence)說出重點”ignore simple facts”，
再用細節補充說明是哪些facts：”they are no longer... many of them...”,
也用in other words說明cavernous這個生字”tall and deep” (又學到新字！)。
HOW DOES THIS ONE STACK UP
"After looking at pages and pages of them I took a chance and ordered this on
e. ...
It has one large slot in the back that can hold many, if not most,
tablets and readers, and the front slots have a lip that is
low enough to be able to put several card-size remotes in it
without them being difficult to fish out when you need them. ...
And the price is right."
作者在這一段說明他找到的商品如何可以解決上一段提到的問題”tall and deep”；
是不是很像寫作時我們提醒同學的，隨時都要緊扣著Reasons來寫呢？
...
BOTTOM LINE
"Everyone’s needs and tastes are different of course but after the research
I did and deciding on this one I like it, a lot,
and it’s the one I recommend."
最後總結段中，重申Thesis Statement “it’s the one I recommend”!
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雖然乍看之下，商品評論好像與托福作文題目沒有直接相關，
但在”we write in order to convince”這樣的前提，
商品評論(說服讀者為什麼這個商品可以買) 與
托福獨立寫作(說服考官你為什麼disagree某個statement)的邏輯與架構，
是可以共用的！
英文寫作要進步，需從研究、內化英文的邏輯開始。
同學若要閱讀更多的商品評論文章，可搜尋Amazon’s Top Customer Reviewers.
或是，你也可以嘗試用英文寫寫你的review，多寫多進步！
寫作若要持續進步，一定要有老師、戰友幫你看、並提供建議。
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